Nguyễn Thị Ngọc A'nh
Student Code: 09120005
Topic: Compare I now with I ten years ago
Standing in front of the mirror yesterday, I suddenly found that I had a little different from I ten years ago. It was the thing I never paid attention to until I got the topic from my teacher. My appearance seems a little bit different from I in the past but it is also in common.
The first thing I looked at my appearance was taller than ten years ago about 33 centimeters. It can be said that the height average with Vietnamese girls is 1.58 meters is OK but I have the height pass over another and I am proud of that. I remembered every times I walked from the gate school to the class or went into the stores, the shops, the supermarkets, everywhere, and even just walked along the streets, a lot of people asked me with the funny questions like “What do you eat in the meals?”, “Why can you be tall like that?”, “Your height is really amazing”. At that time I just smiled slightly and said “It thanks to my parents gene”. That made me very excited because I also like another in eating. Although I did not drink milk everyday and swam a lot when I was a little girl, I am still tall. And just one way can explain about that my mother and my grandfather are tall, so am I.
Besides the difference in the appearance, I am still also thin like in ten years ago. I have never forgot when I was in grade 4, my teacher requested the class to went to the medical room to weigh, measure and checked the health. I was just 22 kilograms and it was not balance with my 1.3 meters, the measure machine said that “you are so thin that you need to eat much more.” Now I am 1.63 meters but my weight- 44 kilograms- is not enough. My friends sometimes call me with the nickname “tall and thin” and I do not like that, so I try to eat. However, tiredness of eating seems take root deeply in mine. That makes me not be able to eat anymore. For example, I rarely go to the canteen to eat with my friends because it is not suitable for my taste and I make the food redundant. I know that is my mistake but I cannot. That is the reason why I often eat in the supermarket and limit to eat in the canteen. Comparison the past, I also liked that, I sometimes let my mother eat my food and the reason I gave was “Mommy, my stomach is full enough, please help me”. My mother quarreled but she still ate for me. In conclusion, my weight cannot still be improved up to the present because of the tiredness of eating.
It was really interesting when I found the difference and the similarity in my appearance between I and I ten years ago. I wonder I must improve my weight too much, which need to be suitable for my height. If I can do that, it will make me more good looking and be better than now.
1. Organization : Introduction, Body, Conclusion have the essential parts of each writing genre. A
Trả lờiXóa2. Development:
- Coherence: logical order, pronouns, connecting (transitional) words, phrases, sentences A-
- How specific and deep is each idea (examples, supporting ideas….)A
3. Language:
- Grammar: (sentence structures)The first thing I looked at my appearance was taller than ten years, Comparison the past B-
- Vocabulary : Comparison the past A-
MARK: 7.8